Garnet
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Post by Garnet on Jul 18, 2006 11:28:26 GMT -5
Help! I'm really stuck on a fight scene in my story Legend. Its between one of my chars Dante who is a dragon kin and a thief. They are in an alley way at night and during the fight Dante acquires Claws on his wrists, he also finds out hes allot stronger than he was before the fight. I have never written a fight before and every time I try to write it seems really lame especially the part where Dante gets claws. Any ideas on how to write it?
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Post by Donald Duck on Jul 18, 2006 11:30:06 GMT -5
Srry. I'd help but I'm kinda lame.
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Elonwe
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Post by Elonwe on Jul 18, 2006 14:02:18 GMT -5
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Post by skittlestiger on Jul 18, 2006 22:19:55 GMT -5
umm, I've always wanted to do a fight scene where someone tries to burn someone's face off with a lighter??? ( the way they fight usually depends on what kinds of charecters they are, so what type are they?? The cruel type or the to the point type??)
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Garnet
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Post by Garnet on Jul 19, 2006 3:26:55 GMT -5
thanks for the link Elonwe Dante is a boy about fifteen. His mother is dead and he lives with his father in an old ruin. The thief is just someone in the city who happens to attack Dante because he want money/food off him bu Dante is poor so he doesn't really have anything except a tiny bag of money he just got from selling his cow at market.
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Post by skittlestiger on Jul 19, 2006 12:11:07 GMT -5
oh yeah, then we probably just have a little knife fight if it isn't premeditated, it would be cool if you had it rip through the bag of money at one point and have all of the coins spill everywhere
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Erik
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Post by Erik on Jul 27, 2006 21:20:24 GMT -5
Yes the coins spilling everywhere sounds very cool. Maybe thats what makes him strike back and become so angered.
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Post by Donald Duck on Jul 27, 2006 21:33:34 GMT -5
I'll try to write it 4 u if u want. ;D
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Post by Deleted on Jul 28, 2006 3:21:36 GMT -5
now now elonwe. let him write his own story!
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Elonwe
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Post by Elonwe on Jul 28, 2006 15:03:42 GMT -5
now now elonwe. let him write his own story! That's funny. Cap'n, Shmuggles confused us! Do you think we could be long lost twins??
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Jul 28, 2006 15:29:32 GMT -5
Interesting web site, that... I'd be better able to help if you showed me what you have written first and I could critique it, so I guess my major suggestions are know your locale and choreography well, write without fluff( people don't often have time to think during fights), remember physics, and use daring punctuation ( I like dashes) but not too much to distract. I suggest you read scenes from books you like and look at what they're doing. This www.fanfiction.net/s/2002087/32/ I think is one of my better ones, in the middle of a Star Wars fanfic, so you can read that too if you find it worthy.
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Post by Donald Duck on Jul 29, 2006 18:21:41 GMT -5
That's funny. Cap'n, Shmuggles confused us! Do you think we could be long lost twins?? I never thought of that! We might be!
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Garnet
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Post by Garnet on Jul 30, 2006 8:06:46 GMT -5
I just have to embarrass shmuggles by saying I'm a girl lol I'll post the fight scene tomorrow. I'm to tired right now. oh and I deleted my previous writing and wrote it from your advice so its just a rough draft at the moment.
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Post by Denithar on Aug 1, 2006 0:40:15 GMT -5
Ah, now you can't complain about met thinking you were a chick Shmuggles. You've done it to someone.
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Post by Deleted on Nov 12, 2006 12:24:39 GMT -5
oh dear.... did I? I can't recall that actually....
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