Brokenhearts
Rank 15 (On Angie's Level)
Beware, all ye who talk 2 me
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Post by Brokenhearts on Jul 12, 2006 16:53:11 GMT -5
Costly Feelings
My life- spinning out of control My thoughts- unsightly Clutching at the seams of my mind Holding my body tightly
I want freedom I want my home I want my body Don’t leave me alone
Feeling caged and trapped Feeling confused and lost Having difference Has a cost
I don’t to lose But if I lose all this I’ll be estactic As life takes the piss
People who surround me They all have things to say I don’t want to listen But life just doesn’t work that way
Feeling caged and trapped Feeling confused and lost Having difference Has a cost
Though I lower lashes I watch them My insides loudly screaming For them to leave me be Yet they all carry on teasing
I hate this emotion The anger inside boiling My heart about to burst My soul slowly spoiling
Feeling caged and trapped Feeling confused and lost Having difference Has a cost
Yes I am detatched There’s nothing for me to hold I gotta make it on my own As my life has been sold
I’m not me at home I can never be I want to be noticed But it’s me they can’t even see
Feeling caged and trapped Feeling confused and lost Having difference Has a cost
So for now I’ll give up For now I’ll stop trying I’ll take control of me later And I’ll carry on hiding
I am different That’s me as I always knew This might be the cost But… I’ll see it through
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Post by Gil Alexander on Jul 13, 2006 20:06:43 GMT -5
"I don’t to lose" Missing a word? Ooh, this stanza is really cool: "I don’t to lose But if I lose all this I’ll be estactic As life takes the piss" Cool poem, in all. Poetry is a great way to express feelings, and you did very well. The first stanza was a little rocky in terms of flow, but it's quite a the poem.
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