Jakazul
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To the ends of the earth.
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Post by Jakazul on Aug 6, 2006 17:03:35 GMT -5
I do want everyone to know that I've purposely made this insanely overdramatic... Still want the comments though.
Shameless Plug
I work out the finishing touches, On my latest masterpiece. Sharp witticisms and realities, So it has everything it needs. Put it for the world to see, And get nothing.
No response, No replies, Maybe one, In your eyes... What's it like? Is it good enough for you?
Don't you love the way I take this seriously?
Once again, I'm alone. No one home. No one on the phone. I decide to check, And see if I have a review.
I look at the latest forum post, Search for criticisms or approvals. Not a single person's said a thing. Not "that sucks" or "that's cool". Now I'm spamming it again, And getting nothing.
Don't you think that you could say something?
Copyright Jake Fox 2006, All Rights Reserved
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Post by Denithar on Aug 6, 2006 19:23:53 GMT -5
Hehe, my excuse would be that I don't read poetry, or write it. I was just browsing, and would never have commented, but for the nature of the piece. It didn't pull my interest, nor was it wittily written. It does however have a very valid point, and I wish we did give better/more reviews. However, poetry=not my thing.
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scarecrow
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Post by scarecrow on Aug 6, 2006 23:00:48 GMT -5
I agree with denithar. It doesn't really grip my interest, because it has almost no real emotional impact. Stating a truth doesn't really make it poetic. It's the sort of thing that's easily forgotten.
Still, I've got to admit that although all you've really done is state a truth, you did it to a friggin' T. And your title made me smile, and it's probably the only reason I even read the poem in the first place. Like denithar, poetry doesn't really suit me.
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Jakazul
Rank 0 (Total Newbie)
To the ends of the earth.
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Post by Jakazul on Aug 6, 2006 23:55:30 GMT -5
Totally understandable. Honestly I didn't write it to be emotional or even memorable in the least. It's not even one of those "poems with a message" trying to advocate more reviewing... It's more of me being bored and wanting reviews. It's a shameless plug.
Most of what I write is for impact and emotion, most of it is directly from my heart, this is far from, but like I said, it's not really meant to be more.
And thanks for the reviews thusfar.
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Post by Emily on Aug 7, 2006 14:11:36 GMT -5
Awww Jakazul... I know how you feel... I guess, if you want more reviews, I'd go to a more serious writing forum.... I know when I write my crappy poems, I get 2 'reviews' at the most.... And they aren't even reviews, just compliments, because no one wants to offend anyone else... I tried to review your poems on the old forum, but I didn't do a very good job of it
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Post by Donald Duck on Aug 8, 2006 16:30:41 GMT -5
Try joing Elonwe's site they give detailed reviews
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Post by skittlestiger on Aug 8, 2006 17:09:58 GMT -5
I wish I could give more reviews, I'm just not very good at it!! I'm really sorry!!
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Aug 24, 2006 18:49:54 GMT -5
Whoah! Hey, I like that. It puts into words what we(I/you/all) feel and the rhythm is good. Some lines are very witty, especially "Don't you love the way I take this seriously?". The later sections are a little forced because you state the obvious rather too obviousle.
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