scarecrow
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Post by scarecrow on Sept 6, 2006 11:09:53 GMT -5
Old poem of mine, retooled.
I've always wanted to add pen to page and sum up gold To make words alive and leap from their paper prisons to become infallible legends and hold young eyes in utter fascination of a yarn spun to impossible proportions
To make a story real and walk the earth in all its transcendence drinking in admiration for sustenance to live on and thusly I should live with it forever and a day
But alas! My pen shall stop no sword and my wit shall fill no cup and my life shall cease 'fore long and to ash I'll turn with unrequited dreams of eternity
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 6, 2006 15:02:48 GMT -5
Yay! I like this one alot. Favorite lines: "to become infallible legends/and hold young eyes/in utter fascination", "But alas! My pen/shall stop no sword", and the whole second stanza. The rhythm is unique and fun, though not perfect.
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scarecrow
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Post by scarecrow on Sept 7, 2006 14:20:37 GMT -5
Harper Lee LucasWan! I totally just recognized you when you said that! lol.
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 7, 2006 15:54:58 GMT -5
Huh? Yeah that's me. You recognized what?
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scarecrow
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Post by scarecrow on Sept 7, 2006 16:04:18 GMT -5
You'd ... you'd reviewed this poem before on the old site, and you said almost the exact same things you did in your old review. lmao. Shows your tastes haven't changed.
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 7, 2006 16:05:50 GMT -5
Heh, nor have I gained words or uniqueness I guess---anyway. Were you the same screenname on the old site?
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scarecrow
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Post by scarecrow on Sept 7, 2006 16:14:18 GMT -5
I was Methuselah when I wrote that. Later on I was Illiteracy.
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 7, 2006 16:20:19 GMT -5
Oh wow! I pictured you and Methuselah different...
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Post by scarecrow on Sept 7, 2006 16:28:01 GMT -5
Well, back when I was Meth, I was way pretend-flirty with Eakyra, and all pretend-jealous with Matt. I was liking the anonymity of the internet, and I used it to be a little adventurous. I like to think I'm more mature now.
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 9, 2006 14:56:31 GMT -5
I pictured you as an adult then, though I paid little attention to any flirting, and more like a teenager now. More loose. Maybe your admin status is where that originates.
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scarecrow
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Post by scarecrow on Sept 9, 2006 15:03:30 GMT -5
Admin status? I've never had admin status, lol. You must be thinking of someone else.
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 9, 2006 15:08:34 GMT -5
I guess so...
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Post by eakyra on Sept 10, 2006 15:02:54 GMT -5
Well, back when I was Meth, I was way pretend-flirty with Eakyra, and all pretend-jealous with Matt. I was liking the anonymity of the internet, and I used it to be a little adventurous. I like to think I'm more mature now. Oh so it was all pretend then huh? Anyway, I still love this poem. It really brings out the soul of the writer. The words you used are extremely dynamic, and though at times some might have to pull out a dictionary... it suits the writer and his style perfectly.
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Post by scarecrow on Sept 10, 2006 20:36:10 GMT -5
Well, I must admit, at first it was just pretend flirting (some just to be random, some to annoy Mattheo). But then I got to know you, and found out how simply sweet and beautiful you were and you captivated my heart.
Ahem. *gets hot under the collar* Uh, maybe that's ... enough gushy stuff.
"A dictionary? I didn't think I used that many big words." he said to divert attention from being openly emotional. (I hope I don't get kicked out of the guy's club for discussing feelings.)
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Post by eakyra on Sept 10, 2006 22:08:32 GMT -5
Not that many... like two. I dont know what to believe... you could still be... "pretending".
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