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Alpha
Sept 9, 2006 14:54:56 GMT -5
Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 9, 2006 14:54:56 GMT -5
thank you Lord for the simple beauties --- suddenly he’s there all long long legs clattering ruffled feathers, ruffled in tri-d and punked, not bronze but black or copper or tipped with wide arrogant gray. he’s so shakily gravityless like the frightened skateboarder but instead a furrie concoction of slim beak and expressive black eyes. --- I go to touch him and he jerks away calmly bounces off, flaps a few times and lands, farther away than he expected either because stumbling he looked less like a sleek dinosaur and more like a teenage turkey. --- thank you Lord for this adolescent raptor this horizontal jet pack my lifting force-- thank you that I am here not squalid, not used able to see that the future has finally come, momentarily, brightly that there is indeed something of metaphor in the teenage turkey who does not know how not to fly.
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scarecrow
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Alpha
Sept 9, 2006 15:02:09 GMT -5
Post by scarecrow on Sept 9, 2006 15:02:09 GMT -5
Over my head yet again. I swear, you might as well be speaking chinese. Whatever it was about, though, I could sense that every present sense of self I always get from your writing, and the last lines (the only ones that I could understand) were very thought-provoking, inspiring. Another job superbly done.
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Alpha
Sept 9, 2006 15:09:10 GMT -5
Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 9, 2006 15:09:10 GMT -5
lol, this one's not that deep! Maybe you expect it to be...it's about a TURKEY!
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scarecrow
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Alpha
Sept 9, 2006 15:11:17 GMT -5
Post by scarecrow on Sept 9, 2006 15:11:17 GMT -5
lmao, I thought you were just using that turkey as a metaphor for something else!
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Alpha
Sept 9, 2006 15:15:07 GMT -5
Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 9, 2006 15:15:07 GMT -5
only by accident...i mean i am, in the last verse, a little bit, though maybe those thoughts are only coordinating.
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scarecrow
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Alpha
Sept 9, 2006 15:18:05 GMT -5
Post by scarecrow on Sept 9, 2006 15:18:05 GMT -5
I'm so thick. Now that you've said, I can see it so clearly. Where was my head?
I guess I'm so used to not taking what you say at first glance.
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Alpha
Sept 9, 2006 15:21:43 GMT -5
Post by Cy Skywalker on Sept 9, 2006 15:21:43 GMT -5
I think that's good. Heh. (p.s. Alpha the turkey is walking around outside the window next to me. Maybe he is a metaphor(peers at Alpha*)...hey that's a good thing for Plotseekers!)
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Alpha
Sept 10, 2006 14:10:31 GMT -5
Post by skittlestiger on Sept 10, 2006 14:10:31 GMT -5
I like turkey, as well as this poem! Good job!
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