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Post by Cy Skywalker on Oct 17, 2006 16:08:04 GMT -5
Once I set my hands around the cup of caf (of imagination’s cocoa, dripped into the day) burning in the pliant palm-skin, more ferocity can be set against shivering. My shoulders lick like companionable porcupines the prickling spines of morning’s cold.
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October sweeps through the gray-floored streets pushing ahead and behind the heat-colored leaves. Through my hands, the only warmth, the muses speak; something burns within each man enslaved by Hallowe’en.
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Post by eakyra on Oct 17, 2006 22:11:51 GMT -5
I really liked the last one. The imagry was great, and the ending made me smile.
The first one, I like aswell. Although the fragments seemed scattered. My shoulders lick like companionable porcupines the prickling spines of morning’s cold. I think after the porcupines, you need a comma. Like I just did. ;D Or something atleast, it just doesnt seem to be a real sentance. Or you could just make it independent.
These poems are very warming, and I enjoyed them very much. ;D
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