another one...lol.

[Spinner]

Another dug up old thing...

Naught is sadder than unreturned love
a pain that can ne'er be quelled
The anguish of passion shov'd
is to lovers a lover's hell
a seething steel by depression forged
a blade pierced true through heart
like a hound upon red meat doth gorge
the pain she tears one's heart apart
the beater from its socket pried
bashed and strewn about
weeping at the love from him deprived
with mounting pains and doubts
and so here is this, tis the broken's antics
the many pains and sorrows of maudlin romantics

[eakyra]

OMG I love this. I think you need to go in and do some editing such as punctuation and capitalization, also in the line..

is to lovers a lover's hell
It seems to be saying to same word and yet you have it written diffrently.

I really love the imagry presented. Great Job Spinny!

[johnsapphire]

Shall I also decline to review this, or may I bite your head off?

different*

[Spinner]

please... bite away....

[Cy Skywalker]

Around the middle this sags and could be cropped, but I like it in general. John Sapphire is going to say that you need periods instead of run-ons, and he is right. He may also say that some lines break the rhythm, but if he doesn't or says something nastier instead I will point out an offending line for you; "weeping at the love from him deprived" ,I thought was off, changing, anyway. I like the blade imagery very much, and the term "maudlin romantics". This poem has much potential. Good use of the style.