A Man Cloaked In Blue

[eakyra]

A joint poem from a former member and I. I wrote it for him long ago and he added some modifications too it.

For my love,

A Man Cloaked in Blue

A man cloaked in blue has arrived
at your port of solemn tranquility,
courting his innate taste of biting reflection…
of honesty that embitters your tongues.
He preaches the critical word without
the hesitant eye of judgment we keep.
Thus this man causes a rift in our
docile hearts and stirs a grand storm.
The Lord conducts our anger flawlessly,
stirring great waves in our sea of emotion.
But alas, no one knows of the cleansing
that these waters bring to our false hands.
Then, the eye of peace within the squall
shines a light of understanding to the blind.
Swiftly, we open our eyes to find him
standing firmly on his rock of truth, untouched.
Slowly, the light fades and the tempest rages,
and once again do we condemn an innocent soul.

[Cy Skywalker]

A pretty nice picture of Jesus (right?). Only one line was too obscure "courting his innate taste of biting reflection…". Perhaps you can explain this. Rhythm was pretty good. Words also, rarely overused. Calm poem...

[eakyra]

If you read the subtitle, it explains how I wrote it for a FORMER MEMBER. Lol. And I hardly think Jesus is a member here. I thought the title itself would have been a dead give away. Then the poem itself would have been enough...

Try again Cy. ;D

I can see how you made that judgement though. Interesting. ;D

[Cy Skywalker]

You said you wrote it "for" him, not "about" him!!!

[eakyra]

Well I wrote it for him about him. ;D

[Cy Skywalker]

Well, I'm sorry, if that's something I ought to be sorry for. Consider these lines and my reasoning; "He preaches the critical word without/the hesitant eye of judgment..." "once again do we condemn an innocent soul". Although, I have a thought of who it really is. lol.

[eakyra]

As I said, I can see through the whole poem actually how you made that judgement.
And your probably right about who it is.

[Cy Skywalker]

Which brings up rather disturbing possibilities.

[eakyra]

Ok, now im lost...

[SapphireBird]

"He preaches the critical word without"

"standing firmly on his rock of truth, untouched."

"and once again do we condemn an innocent soul."

I don't know, dude. That was my first thoght; that you were talking about Jesus. I hadn't read the subtitle. I nevcer do. It ruins the poem, whatever it says.

About the poem, I like your choice of words. It flowed very nicely.