Shark on Land

[roxythekiller]

A poem I wrote back in the day ^_^!

Shark on Land


The senna is fragile indeed
A plant to love
A plant to bleed

See it sprout from the soil
From such a ghostly seed
With pale blossoms
And golden leaves

What about the cruel boys
The ones that stand in the rain
What of the sharks on land
Who smirk mildly at your pain

Will they pluck the bloom from the earth
Ignoring the process
Of its holy birth

Will they hold it in their hands
Or abandon it for other plans?

Look at the flower, crumpled and gray
Watch as its life
Slowly fades away

What if those shark-eyed demons
Stare at you with death in their sights
Will you stare at them
right back at them
Without much suprise?

[paranoidandroid]

Very nice, great images, and very well written. The rhyming was impressive and very well done, there was only one that felt forced, and that was the last one. I feel like "will you stare back at them" would have been a better place to have ended. It doesn't rhyme, but it ends with more force. I really enjoyed reading this, the language you used was beautiful. Wonderful poem.

-P.A.

[Oli]

This really is a great poem, and have to agree about the last verse. Could with a better ending be it the one suggested or something different. Really good work though!