Heart In A Drawer

[paranoidandroid]

First new song I've written in about a year.

Heart In A Drawer

My desk drawer can measure my loves that never were,
In movie tickets, gifts, and old pictures,
And through all the poems you can follow the descent,
From hope to bliss to doubt to regret.

I could store pieces of my heart in these souvenirs,
It always helped alleviate my fears.
So when the doomed romances would begin to fall apart,
I'd still have the remains of my broken heart.

I cleaned out that drawer today,
Threw old bits of my life away,
Tore up the poems they sucked anyway,
They never said what I meant them to say.

You hold me closer, press you hand against my heart,
As the lights begin to dim and the movie starts.
I crumple up the ticket, let it fall down to my feet,
Where it lays forgotten underneath the seat.

-P.A.

[Chris]

I love it, I love it, I love it, I love it, I love it! That sounds like the kind of song that I could listen to everyday and never get bored of it, it's right up my alley. I think the last two verses flow better, are simpler and seem more personal than the first two in comparison because you use smaller, more common words there and shows what it means rather than just saying it. Whenever I try to sing it, those are the verses that I can get a sort of haphazard rhythm going and those are the verses that really send the blood rushing to my head. I would exalt you right now for your excellent work, but I already used it up on that damn Ethan. I promise to do so later, because I love it, I love it, I love it, I love it, I love it!

EDIT: OH, and I think a chorus would be nice too!

[paranoidandroid]

Thank you very much. I fixed up one of the big rhythm problems in verse one (changed "wrinkled pictures" to "old pictures" and got rid of the "old" in the second line), and I'll mess around with some of the word choices there. As for the chorus, I have a little chord progression after each verse, but it doesn't lend itself very well to a lyrical chorus. For the time being its mostly instrumental with some odd vocables thrown in (da da da). I'm very glad you liked the 2nd to last verse because I was unsure about that one.

Thank you so much!

-P.A.