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Post by Emily on Jul 20, 2006 15:35:17 GMT -5
NOW I know who and what pumpkin shoes is!
Just wondering, but why do you write diary entries for her?
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Post by Angie on Jul 21, 2006 11:48:16 GMT -5
She's too lazy to use a pen or type for herself.
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Duskglimmer
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McKay: Have you seen a guy? He looks like you, but with messy hair. I think I lost him somewhere...
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Post by Duskglimmer on Aug 9, 2006 15:59:40 GMT -5
I like this, but I have to say, I'd love a little more detail instead of just "That girl did such and such and such and such." Like, instead of just saying that Pumpkin shoes pulled a few pranks on guildians, I'd love to hear actual accounts of those pranks. And instead of just hearing that you threw Pumpkin Shoes in the cage (which I love the description of, btw), I'd like to see a little more of your reaction (were you embarressed? angry? freaked? What?)
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scarecrow
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Post by scarecrow on Aug 9, 2006 16:11:29 GMT -5
No offense, but your muse is lazy. He/she/it seems more like a peeping tom, gathering insight on your life, than actually helping you. He/she/it should rot in that cage. And I agree with Duskglimmer on the lack of details, it makes everything really thin.
Other than that, though, I really thought it was insightful, and sometimes funny, and always charming (and, no matter what your lazy muse thinks, I'm not just saying that to be nice. In fact, I'm hardly ever nice if I don't have to be).
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Post by Angie on Aug 11, 2006 20:42:01 GMT -5
I think I had a reason for being so vague, but I don't remember what it was. . . I'll probably rewrite parts of it when Pumpkin Shoes decides to do something she rarely does and actually help me. Lol, yeah, I intentially make her really lazy because I hardly ever feel inspired or able to write, so I feel like my muse is neglecting me. Hehe, thanks.
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Post by rubus on Aug 11, 2006 21:11:21 GMT -5
you could give a detailed account on how Pumpkin Shoes killed me. just for fun, ya know.
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Post by Donald Duck on Aug 11, 2006 21:18:49 GMT -5
Now I know who Mia is ;D This is intresting so far but Dusky and Scarecrow are right you do need more details or a reader might want to stray from reading the rest of your story. hehe i like it how she writes to King Arthur
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