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Post by Angie on Jul 13, 2006 20:36:47 GMT -5
Write a poem about what you think happened between these two people: www.bigstockphoto.com/photo/view/175446?Style: any Rhyming: optional Stanzas: same length, any length Length: 15-30 lines End date: ASAP Judge: nonePlease only post here with your entries so as not to clutter the thread. If you have questions, PM me or the judge.
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Post by Angie on Jul 13, 2006 20:38:03 GMT -5
Gilly's Entry
"This money was meant for our future car-- Not a sudden trip to the stars," Adrian said and looked at the bills with a sigh.
"But listen to me," Liv pleaded. "My illness--it must not be repeated; All I want to do is to touch the sky."
He turned from her and stared at his hands, Trying not to look at his wife's anxious stance. "And yet your health is the one thing I fear."
Liv smiled at him and said, "Spaceships silver and rockets red. Seeing the east and west shrink and the black become near.
"But the thing of which you should be afraid Is covering me with squinted eyes and hands of clay, And allowing me to leave this place without glimpsing what's beyond our normal phase."
But before she could say another word, He said with a tremble, "Too long, you I have ignored." Dropping his money, he went to her and kissed her lips of lace.
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Post by Emily on Jul 14, 2006 17:39:39 GMT -5
Why can’t you understand the Pain I feel currently, hurts so Deep inside me, yet you don’t seem To care, you selfish man
You have cut my Heart with the sharpest of Knives and it hurts so Bad I can’t breathe
I try to smile for You everyday, and to Pretend nothing happened Is so hard for me it hurts so
So when you made your Vows to me on our Special Day why did you break Them, it hurts me so.
So smile for once in a while, Because I do it for you every day, And It’s not my fault that the guilt you feel, Grows in strength everyday. And I can’t help but wanting for you to hold me close And tell me that everything is ok, And to say sorry, because forgiveness can be given If only you’d come sooner.
Please don’t shatter my heart.
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Jakazul
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To the ends of the earth.
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Post by Jakazul on Jul 24, 2006 0:25:47 GMT -5
Wow, I just got back in town and saw that this was over, so I'm really glad to see it's been extended and I can give my entry! So here it is.
Out of Focus
I regret everything I said to you, That makes us have to keep going through, This hell that we are about to, Be reliving again.
Every word from my lips starts another fight, And every syllable defines another sleepless night, I keep on telling myself that this can't be right, I keep reliving the pain.
Now I'm up again trying to figure out, If there's a way to stop these pointless bouts. I'm wishing I knew what to do about, This growing stain.
So tell me why do we have to be this way? Up every night with nothing to say. You want me to believe it will be better some day. I want to dissapear.
In your perfect world these feelings are banished. In your perfect world we have both vanished. We've been replaced and I can't stand it, This is my worst fear.
You ask me what's wrong and I say nothing, Another night that ends in lying. Because I only want to stop the crying, So things can be clear.
Copyright Jake Fox 2006, All Rights Reserved
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scarecrow
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Post by scarecrow on Sept 6, 2006 16:37:11 GMT -5
A Tryst and It's Twists Boy meets Girl, you know the rest Some murmured words, an exchanged glance A few more drinks, A fervent kiss Something's awake in that guy's pants Apartment door, Clothes to the floor Next comes the horizontal dance
Huzzah, huzzah, boy, that cloud burst She swore the earth shifted just then Puff and blow in the afterglow Any chance we could do it again? Look at him smile that cocky smile It says, "Just tell me where and when."
And so it goes, pick up the phone Call my name, I'll bring the wine Tuesday's no good, I'm busy then But Friday suits them both just fine Forget the drinks, she teases him 'Cause I don't think we'll have the time
Casual fling, ain't no big thing Things for him are looking sweet But life's too short to waste for her Just 'cause he moves the ground beneath She wonders if he'll stick with her If she stops putting out the treats
Now two's a pair to his despair So much work, he gets no play She talks of houses in the country Lilies on her wedding day She wants to walk a path together He just wants to run away
He's so far now, miles and miles Even though he's still by her side She sees he's such a little dog Shouldering a tiger's pride He'd rather roam the open plains Just 'cause he doesn't want a bride
Sitting in bed, the fun's long gone Hugging her knees, that look in his eye Two to tango, two to waltz Dead is the dance and the will to try And they wonder how it came to this Twisted their tryst until it died.
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Post by eakyra on Sept 9, 2006 3:54:40 GMT -5
Choosing
My mind races with emotions, Putting to question your devotion. Cant think with all this comotion! She loves me still and yet? I cant seem to remember or forget, How again she said they'd met. What should I do? I cant really seem to choose. Her I couldnt stand to loose... Stomachs tight in curl, Do I loose her, my precious pearl? Or do I let her sleep, with this girl?
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Brokenhearts
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Post by Brokenhearts on Dec 22, 2006 19:59:14 GMT -5
ye... kinda 4got *blushes insanely* anyway, am here nw and i shall tell y'all the winner by 2morrow @ the latest ;D
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Post by Angie on Dec 22, 2006 21:10:51 GMT -5
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Post by Angie on Dec 27, 2006 16:18:56 GMT -5
I haven't read or written much poetry in a very long time, so I apologise if I was too harsh in some areas or too lenient in others; this was a bit of a struggle to grade because the "poetry" part of my brain has deteriorated over the past year or two. 1.) Following the contest instructions. 2.) Creativity. 3.) Proper grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc. in the writing contests. 4.) Effort. 5.) Overall talent. 6.) Anything else the judge deems important to the particular contest (Other). Rules: stanzas must be the same length (same amount of lines), 15-30 lines total, base subject off of photo given First place - Gil Alexander: 1.) 10/10 2.) 9/10 3.) 9.5/10 4.) 8.5/10 5.) 8.5/10 6.) (flow and consistency) 7/10 Total: 52.5/60 Second place - Jakazul: 1.) 10/10 2.) 8/10 3.) 3/10 4.) 8.5/10 5.) 8.5/10 6.) (flow and consistency) 10/10 Total: 48/60 Others - Eakyra: 1.) 8/10 (not long enough, only one stanza) 2.) 9/10 3.) 6/10 4.) 8/10 5.) 9/10 6.) (flow and consistency) 7/10 Total: 47/60 scarecrow: 1.) 8/10 (too long by two stanzas (12 lines)) 2.) 9/10 3.) 3/10 4.) 8/10 5.) 8/10 6.) (flow and consistency) 10/10 Total: 46/60 Fallen Angel: 1.) 8/10 (differing stanza lengths in two stanzas) 2.) 7.5/10 3.) 3/10 4.) 8/10 5.) 7/10 6.) (flow and consistency) 6.5/10 Total: 40/60
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