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Post by johnsapphire on Oct 10, 2006 21:21:49 GMT -5
1) I didn't suggest for a moment that you were. I am merely irritated by people who suggest my style of criticizing is wrong. 2) I think I am blunt, not rude. If you consider me to be rude, alert me of the fact and I shall happily neglect to review your pieces in future. 3) I enjoy being busy. It is not stressful, but exhilarating. Your sympathy is kind but unnecessary. Awe, though, is always welcome 4) I am very impressive. When I sink below impressiveness, I am depressive, and therefore detestable. JS An IQ of 167 – 2 points above genius!!!!!!!!
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Post by The Observer on Oct 10, 2006 21:29:00 GMT -5
It is a thin line, rudeness and bluntness, at times you do cross it. Yet it is a thin line, advice and hypocrisy, and at many times I do cross it.
Yet I do hope that you continue to post reviews of my work, your criticism is much appriciated, and you have not offended me personally. If you had, it would have been the fault of mine and not yours.
hoping to hear more from you
The Observer
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Post by johnsapphire on Oct 10, 2006 21:33:42 GMT -5
I cross it and I cross it again. Crossing things is a passion of mine. Except myself. I never cross myself. That's a bit too religious for a confirmed atheist.
You remain oddly genderless. Why?
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Post by The Observer on Oct 10, 2006 21:36:07 GMT -5
hahaha! I didn't notice that! Thanks for pointing it out! I joined this place recently and had not thouhgt to update my profile. Thanks for pointing that out. I'll fix it. Oh, but before I do, I must ask. What do you think I am? I would assume it's fairly obvious but I just have to ask.
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Post by johnsapphire on Oct 10, 2006 21:42:53 GMT -5
I'm not going to answer for fear of being wrong
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Post by johnsapphire on Oct 10, 2006 21:44:24 GMT -5
But if I had to, I'd say late high-school <stricken from the record!> with a slight touch of emo and possibly a trace of ADD.
^85% is BS
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Post by The Observer on Oct 10, 2006 21:47:20 GMT -5
haha! What do you fear? I hope you don't think me unkind in this, but I am fascinated by your response. What do you fear? If you fear to offend me, put that behind you, there is almost nothing you could possibly say in all the world to offend me. Or is it perhaps that you fear the very action of being wrong? Come on, it's not so bad. I'm wrong all the time. Just take a guess, I promise I won't tease you about it. ;D
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Post by johnsapphire on Oct 10, 2006 21:53:32 GMT -5
Hm....soprano, possibly violinist, if not cellist.
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Post by The Observer on Oct 10, 2006 22:04:14 GMT -5
see, that is why I wanted you to post. That was funny! I know a lot of what you said was just made up, but that's okay, it's still funny. Too bad you took off your guess before I could read it, but the rest of it is quite entertaining. But I did say I would tell you if you guessed, so here it is.
I am a boy. Late high-school (very good). Not really emo, I get depressed at times, but in a very differnt way and for very differnt reasons. I am flattered that you thouhgt me a musician and a singer. I only wish I was. I have some skill in brass and have a moderate skill in baritone/bass singing. My real passion is acting though, and I devote a lot of my time to it.
You were very close, by chance or by skill, and it was still entertaining.
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Post by johnsapphire on Oct 10, 2006 22:07:07 GMT -5
Oh my! That changes most things! *shakes head rapidly to oriente himself*
JS
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Post by The Observer on Oct 10, 2006 22:12:25 GMT -5
really? what does it change?
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Post by Denithar on Oct 10, 2006 22:14:39 GMT -5
I feel like I'm in the presence of great minds here... But hey Observer, I'm a baritone too. Chamber choir in my college. And my passion is also acting.
Sheeshtalla, you two guys are freaking amazing though. I enjoy just reading you in your conversations.
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Post by The Observer on Oct 10, 2006 22:18:48 GMT -5
Thanks, althouhg I know for myself at least, that the title "great mind" is not necessarily deserved. Unfortunatly, I really must go to bed now. But before I leave I will give you a poem. And JS, this one has MANY, MANY, ERRORS. So feel free to have a heyday and rip it apart. I would be honored.
There’s an arrow in his side Wounded warrior Broken pride As he staggers beneath the skies Of a world devoid of love
There is blood on his cheek Stumbling creature Deathly weak As he trips, and falls, and cries For water in this desert land
There is fire in his soul Scarred and crippled Heart so cold As he begs to be let go To die in a foreign land
There is sweat on his brow Desperate struggle Breathing now And he coughs and gasps and stops He knows now it’s at an end
There is nothing left within No more pain Just the sin Of living without purpose Beneath a glorious sun
ANd without further ado, have at with the criticism! ;D
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Post by eakyra on Oct 10, 2006 23:24:05 GMT -5
First off, I have to agree with Den about the Great Minds. Wow. I really love this poem. There is one gramatical error that sticks out like a pink horse. The Heart co cold? Im sure you ment so cold, but I made note anyway. Also I think you need to add punctuation to it so it flows into the next line more evenly. There are some lines however where it works perfectly to just end. I love the imagry you presented. And finally, I do wish you'd add a title. ;D
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Post by Cy Skywalker on Oct 11, 2006 7:15:31 GMT -5
The last two lines are very depressing. Good observation. I don't like how the last line of each stanza doesn't rhyme, whereas the rest seemed to be setting it up to.
What defines Great Mind?
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